Section III Writing

Part B

Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the picture below, In your essay, you should

  1. describe the picture briefly,

  2. interpret the implied meaning, and

  3. give your comments.

Write your answer on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

2019年全国研究生统一入学考试英语(一)

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【总体分析】:

1.信息解析:①图片背景及标题“途中”提示场景:登山途中。②两名登山者的动作及对话形成对比(坐 VS站、“不爬了”VS“接着爬”),展现人们在迎接挑战或达成目标的过程中的两种心理:轻易放弃 VS 坚持到底。2.图画寓意:取得成功的途中即使感到身心俱疲,也应该坚持到底,不轻言放弃(励志类人生哲理)。3.行文思路:首段描述图片并揭示图片寓意;第二段展开说明论证;末段重申主题,发出呼吁。


【范文】:

In the picture, there are two climbers on their way to the top of a mountain. One of them, sitting on a stone step with his backpack aside, says in slight frustration, “I'm too tired to go any further." His travel companion hands him a bottle of drink and replies encouragingly, “Come on! Take a break and keep climbing.”The picture intends to illustrate the irreplaceable role persistence plays in realizing great ambitions.

Just as mountaineers have to climb up rocky and steep slopes before reaching the peak, we will inevitably encounter numerous obstacles on our way to success. What is needed then is a sustained effort to conquer them rather than an excuse to give up, After all, surrender means all previous efforts come to naught while hanging on certainly brings rewards. High achievers in competitive sports understand that very well and, almost without exception, attribute their glories to their perseverance with intensive training day after day.

As an old Chinese saying goes, the last leg of a journeymarks the halfway point. The closer we get to the finishingline, the more fatigued and lazier we feel. At such toughmoments, we can only achieve our goals by being strong-willedand gritting our teeth, In other words, the virtue of persistenceis the key to success and thus needs to be cultivated consciously.

图里有两名登山者正在通往山顶的途中。其中一人坐在石阶上,把包放在一旁,略带沮丧地说道:“我太累了,不爬了。”他的旅伴递给他一瓶饮料,鼓励道:“别啊!休息一下再接着爬。”该图旨在揭示:坚持不懈对于实现远大理想有不可替代的作用。

正如登山者必须要爬上崎岖陡峭的山坡才能抵达山顶,我们在通往成功的途中也难免会遇到诸多障碍。此时,我们需要通过不懈努力来克服这些困难而非寻找借口放弃。毕竟,缴械投降就意味着前功尽弃,而坚持下去必将有所回报。在竞技体育领域取得非凡成就的人对此了然于心,他们几乎无一例外会将取得的荣誉归功于自己能坚持完成日复一日的高强度训练。

中国有句古话:行百里者半九十。我们越接近终点线,就越会感到疲惫慵懒。在这样艰难的时刻,只有坚定信念咬紧牙关,才能达成既定目标。换言之,持之以恒便是我们取得成功的关键,因此我们需要有意培养这种品质,


【写作模板】:

The drawing above depicts a(n) touching/encouraging/thought-provoking scene, in which 描述图中重点场景. Below the drawing, there is a caption which reads: 图下文字. Straightforward/Exaggerated as it is, the drawing conveys profound meanings.

The picture aims to remind us that 主题词 is an extremely valuable contributor to the achievement of success and happiness. In our lifetime, there will inevitably be occasions when ________. Under these circumstances, it is 主题词 that gives us the power to 益处. A prime example is 例子(人或事) who/which 阐述例子内容. More importantly, such a(n) quality/trait/spirit/attitude can produce a lasting energizing effect, granting us a fruitful life without regrets. Just as an old saying goes, ________.

In general, 主题词 lays a solid foundation for us to achieve ambitious goals and reap the happiness of success. In order to achieve something in our life, it is sensible/advisable to cultivate this trait consciously and put it into practice.

上图描绘了一幅令人感动(或:令人鼓舞、令人深思)的画面: ________。图片下方标注文字:________。图片看似简单直接/有些夸张,却承载深刻的内涵。

图片旨在提醒我们,________对于获取成功与幸福是极有价值的因素。我们的人生中难免会遇到这样的情形:________。在这些情况下,是________给予我们力量________。________便是一个典型例证,他(或:她、他们、这件事)更重要的是,这种品质(或:特质、精神态度)能产生持久的激励效应,使我们的人生颇有成就、不留遗憾。正如古语所言,________。

总之,_________为我们实现远大目标并收获成功的喜悦奠定了坚实的基础。为了一生中能有所成就,明智的做法是有意培养这种特质并予以践行。


【评分标准】:

评分时,先根据文章的内容和语言确定其所属档次,然后以该档次的要求来给分。评分人员在档内有1-3分的调节分。评分时酌情考虑拼写与标点符号对于正常交际和表达的影响程度,英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。

第一档

很好地完成了试题规定的任务(17-20分)

  1. 包含所有内容要点(内容与形式的统一,与主题相扣);
  2. 运用丰富的语法结构和词汇;
  3. 语言自然流畅,语法错误极少;
  4. 有效地采用了多种衔接方法,文字连贯,层次清晰;
  5. 格式与语域恰当贴切;

第二档

较好地完成了试题规定的任务(13-16分)

  1. 包含所有内容要点,允许漏掉1-2个次重点;
  2. 使用较丰富的语法结构和词汇;
  3. 语言基本正确,只有在试图使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇时才有个别语法错误;
  4. 采用了适当的衔接手法,层次清晰,层次较严密;
  5. 格式与语域较恰当;

第三档

基本完成了试题规定的任务(9-12分)

  1. 虽漏掉一些内容,但包含多数内容要点;
  2. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的需求;
  3. 有一些语法及词汇错误,但不影响理解;
  4. 采用了简单的衔接手法,内容较连贯,层次较清晰;
  5. 格式和语域基本合理

第四档

未能按要求完成试题规定的任务(5-8分)

  1. 漏掉或未能有效阐述一些内容要点,写了一些无关内容;
  2. 语法结构单调、词汇有限;
  3. 有较多语法结构及词汇方面的错误,影响了对写作内容的理解;
  4. 未采用恰当的衔接手法,内容缺少连贯性;
  5. 格式和语域不恰当;
  6. 未能清楚地传达信息

第五档

未完成试题规定的任务(1-4分)

  1. 明显遗漏主要内容,且有许多不相关的内容;
  2. 语法和词汇单调、重复;
  3. 语言错误多,影响读者内容理解,语言运用能力差;
  4. 未采用任何衔接手法,内容不连贯,缺少组织、分段;
  5. 无格式和语域概念;
  6. 未能传达信息

零分档

  1. 所传达的信息或所使用语言太少;
  2. 内容与要求无关或无法辨认