Section III Writing

Part B

Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the picture below. In your essay, you should

  1. describe the picture briefly,

  2. interpret the meaning, and

  3. give your comments.

You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

2018年全国研究生统一入学考试英语(一)

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【总体分析】:

信息解析:①电脑显示“选课系统”及图片主题“选课进行时”提示图中人物身份:大学生。②图中两组内容形成对比(“知识新、重创新、有难度”VS“给分高、易通过、作业少”),展现学生选课的纠结心理体现图画主旨。2.图画寓意:本篇写作可确定为“批驳+引导”型。学生的课程分类方式体现了畏难、功利心理,但不可一味指责学生:学生内因是一方面,社会风气、学校制度等也难逃其咎,解决这一问题也需要各界共同努力。3.行文思路:第一段描述图片,说明现象→第二段分析现象成因及后果→第三段针对问题解决提出建议,并表达期许。


【范文】:

In the cartoon, a college student is sitting seriously in front of a laptop, selecting his next terms' courses. Hesmartlydivides the courses into two groups: those offering cutting-edge knowledge, inspiring innovation, but requiring hard work, and those with little academic pressure and an easy high-score pass. The cartoon reflects a common phenomenon among today's college students, which is actually against the purpose of our course selection system.

Why does this happen? It can be mainly attributed to a social climate which puts too much emphasis onutility”. The current achievement assessment system in colleges which takes credits as the only indicator is also responsible for the phenomenon. However, neither of them is the excuse for students to shrink back from demanding courses and choose easy ones. Avoiding demanding courses will prevent them from building knowledge hierarchy and improving personal competence. Further, as the youth are the hope of a country, that will make our goal of constructing an innovative nation remain a remote dream.

To solve the problem is not an overnight affair, but a long process of concerted efforts, First of all, students should put personal development high on the agenda, striving to be a man of courage, capabilities and responsibilities. Besides, colleges should diversify assessment standards and motivate teachers to deliver knowledge in interesting and illuminating ways. Meanwhile, a new tendency of daring to challenge and innovate should be cultivated. We sincerely believe that the Chinese dream of achieving great rejuvenation will surely be realized by the youth with the joint efforts.

图片中,一位大学生正襟危坐在电脑前选课。他“巧妙地”将课程分成了两类:一类知识新、重创新,但有难度;一类给分高、易通过且作业少。图片反映了一种如今大学生中常见的现象,实际上也是一种违背选课体系初衷的现象。

为什么会出现这种情形?主要可归咎为当下过分功利性的社会氛围。现有的仅以学分为评判标准的教学评估体系也是部分原因。然而,上述原因都不能成为学生躲避困难课程、选择易过课程的借口。因为一味避免困难课程将阻碍学生知识体系的构建及个人能力的提高。更严重的是,青年一代是国家的未来,长此以往,我们“建设创新性国家”的目标将会遥不可期。

解决这一问题并非朝夕之事,而是需要各方长期协同努力。首先,大学生应将个人发展视为最重要之事,努力成为一个有勇气、有能力、有担当的人。其次,学校应使评价标准多样化,并鼓励教师以有趣易懂的方式传授知识。同时,全社会应努力培养勇于挑战、勇于创新的新风尚。我们由衷地认为,在各界共同努力下,中华民族伟大复兴的中国梦必将在年轻一代人中实现。


【写作模板】:

适用范围:“社会风气起推波助澜作用”的负面现象。

The cartoon depicts that ________. At the bottom of the picture the caption reads ________.

The drawing is aimed at putting a spotlight on a social trend (或phenomenon) that ________. In a society that (或where) ________, it is no wonder that some of us ________. Admittedly, the problem is due partly to ________. But a more powerful factor is the fact that ________, which stems mainly from ________.

It's true that to reverse the situation is not an easy task, but a laissez-faire attitude will invite even big trouble. First and foremost, each of us should join in the tide of ________ promotion (或:promoting _________), so that a good atmosphere would be created. Also, remember a simple truth: You reap what you sow, and ________(结合图片进行说明).

图片描绘了________。图片下方的标题写着 ________。

这幅图旨在聚焦 ________ 这一社会趋势(或:现象)。在 ________ 的社会,有些人 _________ 不足为怪。诚然,这个问题一部分原因是 ________。但更重要的一个因素是________, 这主要源自于________。

彻底改变这种状况的确并非易事,但是对其采取放任态度将会导致更大的问题。首先,我们每个人都要加人促进________的大潮中来,这样才能营造一个良好的氛围。另外,记住一个简单的真理:你种下什么,就会收获什么, ________。


【评分标准】:

评分时,先根据文章的内容和语言确定其所属档次,然后以该档次的要求来给分。评分人员在档内有1-3分的调节分。评分时酌情考虑拼写与标点符号对于正常交际和表达的影响程度,英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。

第一档

很好地完成了试题规定的任务(17-20分)

  1. 包含所有内容要点(内容与形式的统一,与主题相扣);
  2. 运用丰富的语法结构和词汇;
  3. 语言自然流畅,语法错误极少;
  4. 有效地采用了多种衔接方法,文字连贯,层次清晰;
  5. 格式与语域恰当贴切;

第二档

较好地完成了试题规定的任务(13-16分)

  1. 包含所有内容要点,允许漏掉1-2个次重点;
  2. 使用较丰富的语法结构和词汇;
  3. 语言基本正确,只有在试图使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇时才有个别语法错误;
  4. 采用了适当的衔接手法,层次清晰,层次较严密;
  5. 格式与语域较恰当;

第三档

基本完成了试题规定的任务(9-12分)

  1. 虽漏掉一些内容,但包含多数内容要点;
  2. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的需求;
  3. 有一些语法及词汇错误,但不影响理解;
  4. 采用了简单的衔接手法,内容较连贯,层次较清晰;
  5. 格式和语域基本合理

第四档

未能按要求完成试题规定的任务(5-8分)

  1. 漏掉或未能有效阐述一些内容要点,写了一些无关内容;
  2. 语法结构单调、词汇有限;
  3. 有较多语法结构及词汇方面的错误,影响了对写作内容的理解;
  4. 未采用恰当的衔接手法,内容缺少连贯性;
  5. 格式和语域不恰当;
  6. 未能清楚地传达信息

第五档

未完成试题规定的任务(1-4分)

  1. 明显遗漏主要内容,且有许多不相关的内容;
  2. 语法和词汇单调、重复;
  3. 语言错误多,影响读者内容理解,语言运用能力差;
  4. 未采用任何衔接手法,内容不连贯,缺少组织、分段;
  5. 无格式和语域概念;
  6. 未能传达信息

零分档

  1. 所传达的信息或所使用语言太少;
  2. 内容与要求无关或无法辨认