Section III Writing

Part B

Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the picture below. In your essay, you should

  1. describe the picture briefly,

  2. interpret the implied meaning, and

  3. give your comments.

Write your answer on the ANSWER SHEET.(20 points)

2021年全国研究生统一入学考试英语(一)

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【总体分析】:

信息解析:①男孩在意同龄人对自己的爱好与梦想的评价,甚至可能因为他人的消极评价而放弃自己的爱好与梦想。②父亲鼓励男孩“自己喜欢就够了”,即不管自己的爱好与梦想在自己所处的群体中显得多么不同,都要勇敢去追求,无需在意他人的眼光。2.图画寓意:男孩的疑虑“周围人对自己的爱好毫无兴趣,是否要继续坚持”与父亲的鼓励“自己喜欢就去做,不要在意他人的看法”形成对比。父亲的话语点明主旨“坚持自己的爱好与梦想”,图片意在鼓励人们勇于追梦,不要受他人观点的左右。3.行文思路:第一段描述图片→第二段揭示图片寓意,展开说明论证→第三段重申主题,发出呼吁。


【范文】:

In the picture, a boy in the Monkey King costume tells his father that many of his classmates find it boring to learn traditional Chinese opera.“ Aren't you yourself fond of it? That is all that matters,” his father replies in a tone of encouragement.

The picture is aimed at inspiring us to chase our passions and dreams regardless of what others may say. The original purpose of pursuing a hobby or a dream is by no means to please others but to lead ourselves to a more fulfilling and meaningful life. It is thus totally unnecessary for us to hesitate to do what we enjoy for fear of disapproval from others. Admittedly, remaining open to constructive advice is conducive to our growth and future success. But we will never be able to take charge of our own destiny if we are easily swayed by throwaway or even biased remarks of others.

To sum up, having a distinctive hobby is nothing to be ashamed of. Different strokes for different folks, after all. Instead of giving in to pressure to follow the herd, we should be determined and courageous to stick to what we feel enthusiastic about.

图中,一位身着孙悟空戏服的男孩告诉父亲,很多同学觉得学唱中国传统戏曲不好玩。他的父亲带着鼓励的口吻回应道:“你自己不是喜欢吗?那就足够了。”

此图意在激励我们追求自己的爱好与梦想,不管他人可能作何评价。追求爱好或梦想的初衷绝不在于取悦他人,而在于让我们自己过上更满足、更有意义的生活。因此,我们完全没必要因担心他人的反对而不去做自己喜欢的事,诚然,时刻听取有建设性的建议有助于我们成长并在未来取得成功。但如果我们因他人随意甚至带有偏见的言论而轻易动摇,那我们就永远无法掌控自己的命运。

总之,拥有与众不同的爱好没什么可丢人的。毕竟,萝卜青菜各有所爱。我们不能屈服于从众的压力,而应下定决心并敢于坚持自己热衷的事。


【写作模板】:

As can be seen from the picture, ________. Straightforward as it is, the picture conveys deep meanings. It is intended to highlight the critical role ________ plays in modern society.

It is generally acknowledged that ________ is of great importance. This inner quality is beneficial to us in that it ________. It is no exaggeration to say that in the long run, we will be even able to achieve our life goals, such as ________, if we can cultivate this quality. In contrast, the lack of it will hinder us from making real progress in ________. Even worse, we may find ourselves difficult to live with and recover from setbacks.

Based on the analysis above, we may draw a conclusion that ________ really counts in today's society. Therefore, we need to ________.

如图所示,________。图片虽看似简单直接,却传达了深刻的内涵。它旨在凸显________在现代社会中起到的关键作用。人们普遍认可________非常重要。正如俗话所说,________。这一内在品质对我们有益,因为它________。毫不夸张地说,如果我们能培养这一品质,从长远来看,我们甚至能够实现自己的人生目标,比如________。相反,缺少它会阻碍我们在________方面取得真正的进步。更糟糕的是,我们可能会发现自己难以承受挫折并重新振作起来。

基于上述分析,我们可以得出结论:________在当今社会确实很重要。因此,我们需要________。


【评分标准】:

评分时,先根据文章的内容和语言确定其所属档次,然后以该档次的要求来给分。评分人员在档内有1-3分的调节分。评分时酌情考虑拼写与标点符号对于正常交际和表达的影响程度,英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。

第一档

很好地完成了试题规定的任务(17-20分)

  1. 包含所有内容要点(内容与形式的统一,与主题相扣);
  2. 运用丰富的语法结构和词汇;
  3. 语言自然流畅,语法错误极少;
  4. 有效地采用了多种衔接方法,文字连贯,层次清晰;
  5. 格式与语域恰当贴切;

第二档

较好地完成了试题规定的任务(13-16分)

  1. 包含所有内容要点,允许漏掉1-2个次重点;
  2. 使用较丰富的语法结构和词汇;
  3. 语言基本正确,只有在试图使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇时才有个别语法错误;
  4. 采用了适当的衔接手法,层次清晰,层次较严密;
  5. 格式与语域较恰当;

第三档

基本完成了试题规定的任务(9-12分)

  1. 虽漏掉一些内容,但包含多数内容要点;
  2. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的需求;
  3. 有一些语法及词汇错误,但不影响理解;
  4. 采用了简单的衔接手法,内容较连贯,层次较清晰;
  5. 格式和语域基本合理

第四档

未能按要求完成试题规定的任务(5-8分)

  1. 漏掉或未能有效阐述一些内容要点,写了一些无关内容;
  2. 语法结构单调、词汇有限;
  3. 有较多语法结构及词汇方面的错误,影响了对写作内容的理解;
  4. 未采用恰当的衔接手法,内容缺少连贯性;
  5. 格式和语域不恰当;
  6. 未能清楚地传达信息

第五档

未完成试题规定的任务(1-4分)

  1. 明显遗漏主要内容,且有许多不相关的内容;
  2. 语法和词汇单调、重复;
  3. 语言错误多,影响读者内容理解,语言运用能力差;
  4. 未采用任何衔接手法,内容不连贯,缺少组织、分段;
  5. 无格式和语域概念;
  6. 未能传达信息

零分档

  1. 所传达的信息或所使用语言太少;
  2. 内容与要求无关或无法辨认